What You’ll Find Here Part One of the “11 Dialogue Tools That Level Up Your Novel” Series
If your novel’s dialogue sounds like your characters are trapped in a Zoom meeting with bad Wi-Fi, we need to talk.
Because nothing — nothing — makes a reader skim faster than cardboard conversations. And nothing makes them fall in love with your characters faster than dialogue that feels so real, you almost check to see if they’re sitting next to you.
The good news (and no, we’re not talking about the Gospel), you don’t need a literature degree, a smoking pipe, or a weird tweed jacket with elbow patches to nail dialogue. You just need to stop making the mistakes that flatten your scenes.
This is Step One in my Dialogue Mastery Series — your personal crash course in writing conversations that are addictive to read. Today we’ll cover the first six tools (and their common mistakes). In Part Two, we’ll tackle the next five, including the one bestselling authors swear by (but never admit to using).
1. Expressive Dialogue
Common Mistake: All your characters sound like Siri or an AI remix of one.
Why It Hurts Your Story: Readers can’t bond with “generic voice” characters. Expressive dialogue builds personality and makes readers hear them as real people.
Fix: Use speech patterns, slang, and tone to show personality — without drowning in awkward phonetic spelling or thick accents.
Sound familiar?
“I am not happy with this decision.”
Improve with something similar to this:
- “Oh, that’s cute. You think I’m just gonna smile and nod like I’m a Yorkville mannequin?”
- “Sure, I’m fine,” she said, stabbing her straw into her iced latte like the lid had personally offended her, and not me.
- “That’s your grand plan, seriously? Just to think I waited around for threescore millennia for someone who thinks suicide missions count as strategy.”
Try This: Take one of your flattest lines and rewrite it three ways — sarcasm, gentleness, and frustration — without stating the emotion directly.
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2. Action-Linked Dialogue
Common Mistake: Dialogue floating in space, like talking heads in a void.
Why It Hurts Your Story: Readers can’t “see” the scene, so the words lose impact.
Fix: Anchor speech to actions or movements. It keeps the pacing alive and the setting clear.
Flat Version:
“I don’t care.”
Improve with an action-linked dialogue similar to this:
- I shoved the notebook across the table. “I don’t care.”
- He reloaded the pistol without looking at me. “I don’t care anymore River, what you do is no longer any concern of mine.”
Try This instead: Write a short exchange where every line of dialogue includes an action beat — no floating voices allowed.
3. Sensory-Linked Dialogue
Common Mistake: You’re telling us what’s said but ignoring what’s felt.
Why It Hurts Your Story: Dialogue without sensory grounding can feel weightless. Sensory detail makes it visceral.
Fix: Let a smell, sound, texture, or taste bleed into the line.
Flat Version:
“I can’t do this.”
Sensory-Linked Dialogue:
- The copper taste of blood lingered on my tongue, not realising I was nibbling on the inside of my cheek. “I can’t do this.”
- Her perfume was everywhere — honey and vanilla — and I couldn’t breathe. “I can’t do this.”
Try This Instead: Rewrite a tense exchange in your WIP using at least one sense other than sight.
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4. Repetitive Dialogue
Common Mistake: Repetition that’s unintentional and boring.
Why It Hurts Your Story: Mindless repetition drags pacing. Controlled repetition creates rhythm, emphasis, and voice.
Fix: Use it with purpose — to hammer a point or reveal a character’s state of mind.
Unintentional Version:
“I said no. No.”
Controlled Dialogue:
- “No. No. And in case your ears are decoratively selective — still no.”
- : “I told you I loved you. I told you. I told you. And you still left.”
Try This Instead: Pick an emotional moment and use repetition intentionally to build intensity — without making the reader want to skim.
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5. Internal Dialogue Juxtaposition
Mistake: Every thought matches every spoken word.
Why It Hurts Your Story: Predictable equals boring. Contrasting internal thoughts with outward words creates tension, irony, or humor.
Fix: Let characters hide, lie, or filter their true feelings.
Too On-the-Nose:
“I’m fine,” she said, and she was ‘fine.’
Juxtaposed Dialogue Version:
- “I’m fine.” (meanwhile, I’m three seconds from throwing a chair through the drywall.)
- (Suspense example): “It’s all under control,” he said, mentally calculating how fast he could run.
Try Something To This Instead: Take a calm line in your manuscript and pair it with a chaotic or contradictory internal thought.
6. Emotionally Juxtaposed Dialogue
Common Mistake: Dialogue matches the exact mood of the moment — predictable.
Why It Hurts Your Story: Readers see it coming. Flipping the emotional tone surprises them and deepens impact.
Fix: Use humor in heartbreak, calm in chaos, or understated words in explosive moments.
Predictable Version:
“I’m furious!” I screamed.
Juxtaposed Dialogue Version:
- (From River): “Oh, this wasn’t on the menu tonight,” I said while the house burned.
- (Romance breakup example): “Well,” she said, folding his shirt with ridiculous care, “I guess that’s that.”
Try This instead: Take a high-drama scene and rewrite it with the opposite emotional tone in the dialogue.
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Looking to learn more? Next in the Series
In Part Two of the Dialogue Mastery Series, we’ll cover:
- The “Invisible Tag” secret
- Pacing dialogue for tension
- Using silence as a weapon
- Layering subtext
- And the dialogue tool I’ve never seen taught, but every bestselling author uses.
Subscribe so you don’t miss it — and if you want the full workbook version of these lessons They’re coming soon (with extra examples, exercises, and actual examples from my novels in every chapter), Subscribe Here so you’ll be the first to know when we drop the Dialogue Workbook Set.
Stay faithful, stay quirky, and stay writing.
With love and fire,
V.S. Beals
Writer. Watchwoman. Woman of the Word.
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